OK so I just HAD to give it a shot! I gave in, what can I say? (I still insist that I am not a poem person!) So this will probably be my 1st and last...
Anyway here it is:

Anxiety

A bead of sweat
For the scurrying feet
A skip of a beat
For the flash of red
A dizzy spell
For the motionless

Do you see, can you feel; are you real.

The throat dries
For the ‘toy’ in his hand
The ears lose heed
On the resonating shrill
The limbs give way
For the damned incomplete

Do you see, can you feel; are you real.

How many more faces
Till my shaking stops
How many more voices
Till mine is regained
How many more lies
Till I wake up

Do you see, can you feel; are you real?

- by Nancy K.

...don't chuck tomatoes!

nancy i really like this.

it creates atmoshphere really really well and it makes you wanna continue reading and that would be my only criticism, that it is good enough to be longer. I really like it, well done kiddo!

Wow!! That was brilliant! Masha' Allah.

Love the way you described the atmosphere as Mabrur mentioned and it also leaves you thinking at the end, and enables you to relate to it.

I was thinking you got that out of a book or something till I saw you actually wrote this lol.

Truly a great piece of work

I sincerely hope this aint the last....

lol awwww thanks guys! 'Tis true I could have extended it more. I shall take that into consideration (if I decide to do another one in my lifetime ) ...I have another scenario in my mind, maybe I'll put on paper sometime.

I agree with M& M above

It has a great way of building up an atmosphere - made me quite nervous, lol

well anyways, its too short, we want more, i say you add a few more paragraphs to that because i wanted to keep reading and you just finished.

Make it complete